Nice shares! I was thinking of creating a haiku thread last night but after a few search, I found there's an existing one, so I just decided to bump an old thread.
I'm a newbie at this but I just wanna share some pointers I'm also trying to apply on my attempts:
1. We should not be strict on the 5-7-5 form because it doesn't really apply outside the Japanese language. As long as we follow the context by heart that it should be uttered in one breath with no unneeded words.
Snow in my shoe
Abandoned
Sparrow's nest
-Jack Kerouac
2. Avoid subjective words. Let the reader create the feeling. If you're feeling the joy of summer, then describe what you see that made you happy. Say teardrops instead of sad. SHOW, DON'T TELL.
And the good thing about being objective is, it is very possible for the readers to create emotions more than what you were expecting.
grandma's coffee table
the yellow green orange
of old jelly beans
-Megan Arkenberg
3. Use of season words. Kigo. It very important to wrap the scene in one frame of expression and that's where Kigo comes in.
Contemporary dudes don't use it, they use keywords instead like cake (a birthday), notebook (school season), bibingka (pasko! hehe) etc.
harusame ni ôakubi suru bijin kana
in the spring rain
a big yawn...
pretty woman
-Issa Kobayashi
4. There shouldn't be a title and rhyme is not really important. Japanese haiku are written in one line. The first line is usually the title if you need a title for recognition.
This is Basho's most famous work known as (titled as) "Pond"
furuike ya kawazu tobikomu mizu no oto
old pond . . .
a frog leaps in
water’s sound
-Matsuo Bashō
5. This is what I found very hard to apply and understand: There should be a juxtapositon of ideas that will be united as one.
With most Japanese Haiku (btw, Haiku is used for both singular and plural form) the use of Kireji is very essential.
There is no exact equivalent of kireji in English, and its function can be difficult to define. It is said to supply structural support to the verse.[1] When placed at the end of a verse, it provides a dignified ending, concluding the verse with a heightened sense of closure. Used in the middle of a verse, it briefly cuts the stream of thought, indicating that the verse consists of two thoughts half independent of each other.
Haiku is cool so please share more guys!
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Originally Posted by Taga-dagat
